So this is an experimental piece and it's not terrible but I feel like it does need a lot of work done to it before it become something. That's the beauty of experimental work, it's a work in progress and this could do with more. For starters there was a blank 1-2 seconds of no sound at the beginning. This could have been better utilized by adjustments to the volume to give it some sort of rising to the climax effect. I liked most of the beginning but it didn't give off much of a climax. It felt blend to listen to and sounded generic when I listen to it. Reaching 0:54 I had given a little hope for when vocals hit and expected a different climax instead. Even so it still felt off. Throughout there seemed to be a bit of background noise and that didn't quite ring in my ears tbh. I think if you added a bit more structure and some melody it could have been good for something orchestral or cinematic. For this I'm gonna have to give you a 4.5/5
Tips: Try to incorporate more instruments into this with some soft drum parts after 0:54 which could help. A bit of choir would have made this better than what it is right now.